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fixing sentences
WALT add supporting detail/ideas to our writing
WALT write a range of correct sentence types
During the holiday, I went to the beach with my friends. We saw there was a
volleyball net. We asked a family if we could borrow their volleyball. We played
volleyball for about an hour then had some lunch. Before we went home, we gave
the volleyball back to the family. I had a lot of fun at the beach with my friends.
volleyball net. We asked a family if we could borrow their volleyball. We played
volleyball for about an hour then had some lunch. Before we went home, we gave
the volleyball back to the family. I had a lot of fun at the beach with my friends.
Read this simple recount.
What do you notice about the recount?
There were to much we’s there
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What could we add to this recount to make it more detailed?
Put i in the first we
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Edit this recount above to make it more detailed:During the holiday, I went to the
beach with my friends. We saw there was a volleyball net. I asked a family if we
could borrow their volleyball. Then we played volleyball for about an hour then had
some lunch. Before we went home, we gave the volleyball back to the family. I
had a lot of fun at the beach with my friends.
beach with my friends. We saw there was a volleyball net. I asked a family if we
could borrow their volleyball. Then we played volleyball for about an hour then had
some lunch. Before we went home, we gave the volleyball back to the family. I
had a lot of fun at the beach with my friends.
Monday, 14 October 2019
life's a stage writing
on the first day of school room 10 did a life's a stage we had to do words about the stage i did he matrix the blue ones are mine.
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